You have a strong start to every stanza that makes whoever is reading it want to know why and throughout the poem, every stanza grows stronger, closer to home, and holds more meaning. The farther you read, the more you can relate to it, so the orginization of the poem is simply fantastic.
The Supercalifragilisticexpialidocious verse was the one that really blew my mind. The imagery was fantastic and I went through a series of relative flashbacks I'd love to tell you exactly how much this wowed me, but I'm currently lacking the vocabulary.
The only real critque I can provide is that I think the last stanza doesn't have as much umph as the rest of the poem. Does that make any sense? :/ but I can't think of any way to improve on it that would maintain the flow or the poem and the same closeout that the current one provides
You have a strong start to every stanza that makes whoever is reading it want to know why and throughout the poem, every stanza grows stronger, closer to home, and holds more meaning. The farther you read, the more you can relate to it, so the orginization of the poem is simply fantastic.
The Supercalifragilisticexpialidocious verse was the one that really blew my mind. The imagery was fantastic and I went through a series of relative flashbacks
The only real critque I can provide is that I think the last stanza doesn't have as much umph as the rest of the poem. Does that make any sense? :/ but I can't think of any way to improve on it that would maintain the flow or the poem and the same closeout that the current one provides
I'll let you know if I can think of one though