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anxious by =Agent-Angel:iconAgent-Angel:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Teen or Young Romance > Fixed


My eyes are glued to the window
and my pulse throbs in my mind
while it wrestles with a question,
though my tongue is in a bind.

There's idle conversation
and I spy an opening ahead
but then the topic switches
and each inhale fills my lungs with dread.

My tongue weighs heavy in my mouth
as it pushes past fear towards dry lips.
I take a deep breath -- here we go --
and quickly cross my fingertips.

I blurt it out in a syllable
and a silence follows I'll never miss.
Then he switches gears and pulls me close,
replacing all doubt with a kiss.
©2009 =Agent-Angel
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anyone who's every tried to work up the nerve to ask someone out knows that emotional rollercoaster :)

entry for :iconmyownformoftherapy:'s contest :]

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~pophipi Oct 12, 2009, 5:52:57 AM
What a rollercoaster indeed. :B

I love how each stanza builds up a bit more tension than the last, and then the ending goes BOOM with fireworks.

It's descriptive, true, and lovely in every regard. :D

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If you're reading this message, I bet you that you spend a lot of your time staring at glowing rectangles. ;)
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=Agent-Angel Oct 12, 2009, 7:37:32 AM
:giggle: It was very suspenseful in real life too :D
kept saying "alright, I'll do it then."
and changing it last minute before I decided
that if I chickened out, I'd regret it =p

--
we're more than artists, we're works of art.
~artistic-advancement
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~pophipi Oct 12, 2009, 2:24:40 PM
Heh, same. First time I decided to ask someone out, I basically got close to them and then chickened out 7 times in 2 days, then finally just exploded with the question XD. Love turns people schizophrenic. :B

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If you're reading this message, I bet you that you spend a lot of your time staring at glowing rectangles. ;)
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~tophat-deadbunny Oct 12, 2009, 3:12:06 PM
HOLY JESUS!
I JUST went through that, minus the conclusion.. I have yet to actually DO it, so I think I'm gonna the next time I get the chance!

--
Shepherd is chased by the wolves, wolves who live by intolerance and hate for what they couldn't understand.
Blinded and vicious are the beasts, needing and ripping at a beautiful human who did nothing more than be himself.

--Trivium, Sadness will Sear
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=Agent-Angel Oct 12, 2009, 3:29:56 PM
You very well should :D
nothing ventured nothing gained and so forth
:hug: good luck!

--
we're more than artists, we're works of art.
~artistic-advancement
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=MyOwnFormOfTherapy Oct 12, 2009, 3:34:30 PM
:D oh i like!

--
"And he pushed them
And they flew"
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~pophipi Oct 12, 2009, 5:20:34 PM
Heh indeed, yet people will still do anything to get it. What a peculiar thing. Peculiar but impossible to resist. :B

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If you're reading this message, I bet you that you spend a lot of your time staring at glowing rectangles. ;)
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